This is good, the title caught my eye. Sorry about the translation thing, I get it now. I do not put my words to music, yet, I am meeting with songwriters on Wed. and the 50 Cent thing I have will most likely not be unless improved and made to be able better to what I want it to be. Wed. will be a very different day to put it one way.

I really love this. I like the title... keep writing =]

Vivid, bold, almost surreal. It reminds me of some people I'm fed up with, tho. ^^ Nice work...keep writing.

Lovely writing. You did a wonderful job in conveying your agony and distress, I can almost relate to it. Its so sad.. so miserable.. so finalized. vivid images, and great word choice. I liked the italicised words. Very powerful! write on.

--Meme

Amazing, I really love this, it's great.