This is the first time I've read a poem about parents... and WOW. :) I think we awfully have similar feelings towards parents && there are lots of people who feellike you, too. I loved how the poem was blunt and straight-to-th-point. There are no unnecessary words and it was wonderfully written. Best poem I've read so far that isn't about love/romance/whatever. :)

aw, i'm close to my family so reading this saddens me greatly.good job though.

I think everyone has a feeling similar to the one expressed here, at some point or another. The older you get, the more you want to have your own space and be able to do things the way that best suit you. But exactly how strong this feeling is, and what causes it, is what creates the differences between every person's experience. From just what's said in the poem, it's hard to guess exactly what the other factors are, but this is actually a good thing. The fact that it's relatively general makes it easier for the reader to relate to. If it was too specific, the details might stand as a wall between speaker and listener.

Reading through it again, there's a bit of a difference between the first four lines and the rest...maybe because 'hide' and 'pry' have a similar tone and are both placed at the ends of their lines. That makes it seem like there might be a repeating pattern in the lines to follow, but there isn't. The rhythm of the lines is different after that point as well, and it's a little jarring, I suppose. On the other hand, the repitition of the word 'mine' seems to give it an emphasis, like the speaker wants to highlight the break between what belongs to the parents and what belongs to the speaker. There are lots of ways to read into that focus...but I think that says more about the reader's outlook than the writer's.

On the whole, though, the topic of this piece can be seen clearly, and that in itself gives it a purpose. I like that it's something others can understand as well. Who hasn't been frustrated by their parents' views, and the feeling that they're being pushed around or misunderstood or just not given any privacy? Even people who have been out and on their own for a while must have felt this way at some point, even if they've forgotten since then.

kind of how I feel toword my dad... but its not the same thing as your situation since we don't really talk anymore. As my mom says though "As long as you live under my roof, you live under my rules." which I can understand. Anyway from

For me this piece is very blunt and in-you-face, i would have prefered i think some type of symbolism, something that is not so upfront but stills gives the message you are trying to convey. Other then that i like it, i feel the same most of the time!

After all this time, and you are finally realizing that they are doing this...what took you so long? If you have such a big problem with them, MOVE OUT!

i know how that is...

kill em.

thats kewlio ^^ i think its good love

I can totally relate. It's just me and my mom and and her and I battle over the same thing. I like it! Good job!