It's pretty hard to look at this story because it's too one-dimensional. You really don't know what Kali is up to, or what she's doing. It's more of a landscape and a piture of the over-all scene. Not very compelling, really... but magnificent imagery. To be honest, I like how everything else seems to be a character, but their development seems almost off. It would be great if you punctuated the emotions more.

i really like your style.i also love the setting here.

btw thanks for the reviews. im kind of working on sycamore a lot and i thought about your suggestion when i wrote the 3rd chapter. thanks a lot.

pls keep writing. still waiting for the 2nd chapter of behind clouded eyes. XD