oh, wow. this is so beautifully written. it's incredible how something this short can say and mean and have so much to it...

it's like heartbreak written in code or something. i think there should be an 'is' in the second line or maybe i've just become illiterate.

exams..garghh

Wow, that stings (so, good word choice, lol). I like this. It's short and simple, but it packs a punch. Nice job. Keep writing! :)

Ouch. That's really the first thing I thought when I read this, lol, sorry...this conjures an idea of lost innocence/virginity up...to me at least...it's very harsh I think, really a sad fate :(. Love, Mia

interesting format; i really like the use of color too. beautiful.

I like the cut format, it looks like bars from one side, or blades of grass. Structure fabulous, and I like the use of irony too.

So tragic, the end is so powerful, and I love how you seperated the lines that way. Nice job. *

I like this poem.