this i can totally relate to... damn clocks...like the spear from the clock hands image, and "never try to build castles in calendar squares" oh it's all so familiar...

mezzie

strikes me as hopeful... makes me think that everything will turn out okay. thank you.

"and yes, i know storms don't last foreverbut dear, neither does good weather

so punch the clockand hope for a different dayto start-departpainted velvet blue and spaded queenand i'll show you how i can bewhen the night turns green"

speechlessly beautiful. SPEECHLESSLY SO. Argh!

Wow, nice poem here. I loved the expression of words and the way you put feelings into words. Nice job!

This was awesome. I love the topic, you put it to good use. I like the second to last stanza the most. It stuck out the most to me. Good job.

never try to build castles in calendar squares

! gah!! you are a genius. it's unbelievable :|

strong ending, i rather like that, it seemed like such a relationship poem at the startbut then ends independent sort of, i like that, anywayz, muchly excellent job here

wow, i really like how much thought you must have put to come up with this poem...i really like that "as our twenty-four-hour love withers away"...very good job...

truly yours...

Very, very heavy. I loved "and yes, i know storms don't last foreverbut dear, neither does good weather"it's perfect...it works really well in this poem. I can relate to this kind of romance, and it's a great way to express it. Especially trying to fit things into calendar days. It's nearly impossible. Great write.

... so many amazing lines and phrases. i love 'spearing the loose endsholding the you and metogether' and 'never try to build castles in calendar squares'. amazing. ♥

Oh wow. This makes me want to cry because it makes me think of things I would really not rather think about right now. I think its pretty fabulous.

Wow! Excellent write.

I love this poem... Especially the last stanza.

as our twenty-four hour lovebegins to wither away. -Loved that; it's like suggesting that time has no limits, it can be bended and changed at will.

Much love,Juliet.

whoa. every single line was just perfect. the third last verse really got to me. it made me stop because you wrote it in such a way that it was breath-taking. i can't describe it and i dont know what to say. i am in awe of the way you wrote this poem. every single line, every single verse, every single word was just written to the absolute perfection. this is added to my favourites.