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| Kotex Fits Period 2008-05-24 ch 1,  | abuseWhat I liked about this was that it was real but that's what I hate about it too. Marriage seems like that, everyone says they're in love, they go real fast and get married. Then they get bored and no longer feel the need to do romantic stuff then comes the divorce. Or maybe not, cause they have too much memories together so to say. But they did get married? |
| Murphy's Lawyer 2008-02-05 ch 1, | abuse-jaw drops- Wow. Loved it. Guessing it's a woman thinking about how her relationship has faded over the years? But I don't know. I'm just the reader. - ML |
| paradiie 2007-12-05 ch 1, | abusebeautiful. |
| BetterOffAsLovers 2007-08-30 ch 1, | abuseI love this bit that says: "We are a delightful letdown." |
| mary 2007-08-29 ch 1, anon. | abusethis was wonderful maroon! my god the memories of sex and the dates were so brilliant and beautiful. i'm hopin you countiue writing this beacuse it doesn't say it's complete yet! plz update soon! |
| Karuli 2006-07-20 ch 1, | abusesweet and sad : ) |
| burningr4inxxc0r 2006-06-28 ch 1, | abuseHorribly wonderful. =/ -Lqd |
| minute-glass 2006-04-30 ch 1, anon. | abusewow. i don't even know what to say, other than this is really good. it's so sad how love can turn to this... writing about the good memories really adds effect to what you're trying to say. almost makes me want to cry. it's like a lost love, except you have to relive it everyday, because you see that person constantly. then you're reminded of what you had and lost =[ |
| Darkest Dream 2006-04-29 ch 1, | abuseI'll wait for the next chapter.. make another one |
| Shahr 2006-04-28 ch 1, | abusem nice, i'd say more, but i don't like voicing contreversial opinions *smiles* |
| chocolate*covered*cherries 2006-04-28 ch 1, | abuseso good.. |
| PeRin 2006-04-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseNice... |
| Green Eyes 2006-04-27 ch 1, anon. | abuseI suppose its something we all hope never happens to us- but i guess the fleeting nature of love means we can't hold onto that first rush forever- try reading robert browning's poem 'two in the campagna'- its basically about the insubstantiality and transitory nature of passion- it links it quite well i think.You built up all the emotion really well- i felt quite deflated at the end :( its so sad. Bu i guess thats the point. Yeah, i guess the short sentences thing could be grating but i think that you used htem really well here- i might be reading too much into it here (i'm studying hard for my english literature A-level exam and am analysing anything i read out of pure habit!) but it seems like the shortened syntax is representing the way she is feeling really snsure of herself and the world around her? or am i just being a really pretentious english lit student? (very possible!) |