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| Switch 2008-04-28 ch 8,  | abuseThis story isn't bad, but there's a lot you could do to improve it. First, the pace is really fast. There's not a lot of descriptives or anything, just 90% dialog, so you might try to use more descriptors to develop the characters and setting more. Also, you need a beta or at least go through and read your chapters before you post them because the minor spelling errors are frustrating. You've put "Defiantly" instead of "Definitely" several times. I look forward to seeing what will happen next and I hope my comments were constructive. ^_^ |
| Broken Pierced Beauty 2008-03-18 ch 8, | abuseOMG no! Atticus was my favorite character, I loved him but now he's just being an **!! More soon please!! |
| shamus-celtic-heart 2008-03-11 ch 5, anon. | abuseyou made me cry i love Atticus! absolutely lovely story |
| Calista Boom 2008-03-10 ch 8, | abuseOh So good! Okiee favorite line: 'I want to pierce you.' -> 'That wasn't a common greeting.' HAHA! I love Kendall and Thom, Charlie, and Terrance are the ** |
| drea55 2008-03-08 ch 7, | abusei love the story hurry so i can read more ha ha |
| fourstitch 2008-03-04 ch 3, | abusevery interesting! i think i have a crush on atticus too. haha four stitch |
| fourstitch 2008-03-04 ch 2, | abuseaw. kendall sound so cute! i love this four stitch |
| vogueantichrist 2006-12-17 ch 6, | abuseKendall seems so cute. I love this story. I hope you update this soon. |
| SkyLark555 2006-11-19 ch 6, | abuseomg awsome fic thus far I so can't wait till you update |
| Jamestastic 2006-08-30 ch 6, | abusei hope you can add more... i really love this story... :]and life wont be complete until i know what happens... so yeah.xD |
| Anne Onymus 2006-07-23 ch 6, | abusei love this and i love you! O.o wo... i say that WAY too often, your no doubt feaked out by me. i should stop. oh no! i don't want you to be in trouble! don't your parents (or legal guardian or whoever is punishing you, whatever) know that my life depends on your stories?! ~SOBS~ :'( anywho, i srill love you! omg,t hat rhymes! (okay, i should seriously shut up now.) Post when you can't! x0x MWAH!-Anne |
| BreathingFlames 2006-07-16 ch 5, | abuseAw...*sniffle* I love it but am now rather depressed. More please? |
| Anne Onymus 2006-07-16 ch 5, | abuseyou break ~snap~ my heart. Poor Kendall :'( i hope that Atticus decides/finds out thathe's gay... that would be so happy! :) Post soon, love :)-x0x Anne |
| BreathingFlames 2006-07-01 ch 4, | abuseEek! *dies* Cliff-hanger...how could you? *sob* I wanna know what happens, dammit! Please? Pretty please? With a cherry on top? *grovel* |
| NeoZenith 2006-05-30 ch 2, | abuseOh my dogs! *cuddles Kendall and Atticus* I love these two! Brilliant characterization. |