This is definitely more ethereal than my poem. Call me old-fashioned, but I just figure that poetry should, you know rhyme. (I apoligize in advance if there is a rhyming scheme in here that I just can't see). I suppose that rhyming adds limitations, which can prevent your imagery from reaching its full potential.

I suppose that I'll look up information on haikus and work on being a bit more airy. This is a great, airy poem. Definitely loaded with imagery, it definitely gets your emotions across. The lack of rhyming bothers me, but that's just me. Old-fashioned. Great poem.

i can relate to this. i like your word usage and the imagery you use here. good job and nice concept too!

Forgetting our childhood innocence in not looking for our faults, but finding them beautiful and the corruption of age, trying to change something that should never be touched. I love this, your sense of beat really takes you into it. Changes it from what could also have been a stream of thought into something new and beautiful. The release was beautiful and truly left a resonating note within me.

I see the similiar perspectives in our mirror poems, definitely. Very nice, but I can't say I'm too crazy over the "leaks colour" line. It really bothers me, and ruins most of the first half of the poem for me (except for the "a shadow with substance" part). That being said, the second half more the makes up for it, especially the last two lines.

Okay, first of all, I'd like to say this. I think the reason your poetry seems so good to me is that it really resembles my poetry. Possibly similar influences? Point is, the style and flow rock. The way the poem moves is just so perfect, and so... real. It feels comfortable to me, but again, that's probably because of similar writing styles. Nonetheless, this is very good writing.