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| rassoodock 2008-06-12 ch 1,  | abuseyou have a knack for the parenthesis, don't you? i like your style of the little short poems that have a big message. the sarcastic tone was well done, also, with just the right amount of bite. i enjoyed this poem and i am taking to your style quite quickly. |
| EllYouSeeWhy 2008-03-10 ch 1, | abusecan somebody PLEASE tell me what parenthesis is? and what she said | v |
| smile for the sunshine 2008-03-01 ch 1, | abusehaha, i love those magnetic poetry things. they are so much fun to play around with. you write stuff there that you usually wouldn't because the amount of words are limited. but i think this is true. the bible actually says something about this somewhere...something about if you lust you end up with a stinking accumulation of mental garbage, cheap sex and something else. i don't remember it exactly. but yeah, reminded me of the bible. so that's a good thing. =] |
| Theory Of The 4th Dimension 2006-10-12 ch 1, | abuseNice, so much meaning in it's grevity. I liked this type ofp oem, such a succint way to smack you with the truth. |
| Manuel Fajar 2006-10-05 ch 1, | abuseHah—look which poem I found to post on, And, from your assay, I must quite differ, What happens in bed 'tween man & woman, Can become a bull-riding event, yes; But, can also be the most sublime art, Where two souls entwined reach for perfection, In the compatibility of love, With pure light of understanding shining, And red gossamer of pleasure pulsing; Yes, there are so many ways to make sex, A casual and trite experience, Something that's quick forgot and noted less,— But, there are times when Heaven glimmers forth, And, all the holiness of creation, Is merged in one act of hot coitus. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-07-13 ch 1, | abuseYes, indeed. |
| KonekOniko 2006-06-26 ch 1, | abuseI love the sarcastic tone in this poem. Awesome use of parenthesis |
| Atelophobia 2006-06-07 ch 1, | abuseAh, sex is earning such a bad rep. But we all need it to multiply, no? But I doubt that's the kind of intercouse you're talking about in this poem. I love the use of the parantheses & the sarcastic, bitter tone (?) of this poem. Short but definitely effective. |
| Katterree Fengari 2006-05-31 ch 1, | abuseehee, nice. Of course, nice use of parenthesis. Interesting alliteration. |
| KIFFRYN 2006-05-25 ch 1, | abuseIts discriptive in just a few words. I love it. |
| MR.SEAN 2006-05-15 ch 1, | abusethat last line is amazing, ( ) |
| breezy nostrils 2006-05-06 ch 1, | abusei love how you used the parentheses. it put it into perspective. keep on going! |
| Seras Nova 2006-05-03 ch 1, | abuseDifferent. Eccentric. True. Nice job. Keep writing. -Seras |
| poisonous 2006-05-02 ch 1, | abuseyou hit the nail on the head. from my past experiences with sex, this poem sums it up completely. |
| Faithless Juliet 2006-05-02 ch 1, | abusePersonally sex has such a bad rep - I think it is what it is. It isn't candles and flowers (though sometimes it is) it's more like a release usually just between body and body, but it's true that it is better when there's love mingled in there (somewhere) I just like to see it as it is. It can be very romantic, but it's usually 'honey I'm home and I'm horny.' Keep up the good work. Much love,Juliet. |