^o^Wow...I like how you use a lot of synonyms to describe the same thing (supporting, stabilizing). Very dramatic, I like it. When you say vertebrae fall, sliding away, it doesn't paint a very pleasant picture, ew. I especially like it when you say, pulling, anchoring, reminding about the necklace. Have a certain one in mind? Keep writing more, because I like your style!

i have an odd feeling that read this before. am i hallucinating?

but no matter.

the best lines (in my opinion) were, "try to imagine each vertebraestacked neatly upon the nextsupportingstabilizinga column of strength." that's hotly (not a word) fresh and vivid. and like the little alit. in there for fun.

your poetic style is very mediative, isn't it? it fits, makes for pensive moods. so i am off to ponder. keep writing.

it even looks like a spine of sorts, very interesting indeed. and, being one prone to cracking under pressure, i can most certainly relate. i can't wait to read your other poem! it's nice to see you back on fictionpress!

honorata

aww! small heap on the ground? i feel like this is what gatsby might feel like... "Oh God" "glared tragically at me"

anyway, away from that tangent...i really like the bits about vertabrae (sp?), because i think they really help to give imagery and it just adds a bit of something different, not just your typical poem about standing tall. i also like the silver chain. if i were a literary analysist, i would probably sit for days and ponder the symbolism of these two items...but i'm not so i won't. i'd probably be wrong anyway, and i think overanalyzing poetry just takes away from it...

really good! i like the style. post more! after may 6, of course...

HAH! Very consise, shocked me into stupefaction. A short poem, but i like the shorter ones. . . excellent job!