Wow...interesting format-i loved it! Okay, I'm going to warn you now that I am the worlds worst reviewer. I get completely wrapped up in the story or poem I am reading and then only pull myself away from the reverie because I know how wonderful it is to be reviewed, myself, but then I can never find anything deep and helpful to say. sorry.

Touching and painful. Very interesting format.

really interesting form play. i like "hand(there aretimes whenI need torely onsomeone)."

mostly, i like how even with the chopped form, it's honest and coherent. you should keep up with the poetry (by the by, it's lindsay with a new penname).

one more thing: cool idea with the italized (i definitely butchered that word) message: GRAB MY HAND. SAVE ME? i just like how that's seperate from the other thoughts. smile dreamer.

oh, i like this one. it seems like it would be a song. a good one, i mean. not a stupid yodely poppy song that kelly clarkson would sing-something really good, beautiful and melancholy. i do enjoy your poems so much, you should send some to phantas (if they'll even look at you, because you're a SOPHOMORE, and they won't deal with the likes of YOU). marcus says don't do drugs!

honorata

wow, this is really fast-paced and gripping! i also really like the double use of the word 'me', with both "save" and "help" - very clever!

this is really good! i don't really have anything to criticize...

okeys, i'm going to review your other one now..

I like this a lot, it's sharp and I like how there are underlying words and thoughts in it.