'Kay, I'll try not to give a useless review here... You did a good job with the rhythm and rhyme, and as it doesn't appear that you stretched yourself to do that, it enhances the poem. The imagery is great; you make amazing word choices that get your point across in unique ways. I really like the repetition near the end, and the way you tie it all together there. Finally, the tone of the poem was melancholily (don't care if it's not a real word!) beautiful; it was almost heartbreaking. So, all in all, you really did do a great job.