wow! i really love this poem. it's not like your usual stuff somehow. like your words and picture descriptive sentences have matured somehow. my fave stanzas are the 3rd and last. i'm listening to Metallica's "Blackened" and it's like the last stanza is some added part of the song that only you heard. awesome! onward little poem to my faves! *goes forth to put in favorites* owari x

Yea! You did finish it! o6 Happi! I like the set up of this one too. My fav line, 'used and abandoned you mumble your sinsutter without as you bleed within'.Gives Hyde 'god job' double thumbs up!

This is bliudy amazing. Well written: beautiful ryming scheme and rhythm. Well written indeed

I love how this begins with 'and.' The diction is quite nice, however some words may need to be modified; the rhythm in some places is a bit jerky and slightly off. But other than that, I love the language. It's a bit dark for my taste, but you did a great job with it. Keep writing.

Wow. Really powerful. The rhyme was great.