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| the-foresight 2006-09-05 ch 1,  | abuseI loved the way your wrote this, in ye olde stylee. It worked well, good poem. |
| Alex J. Finn 2006-05-03 ch 1, | abuseyet another name change... imagine my perplexity when i entered the url and was led to an "invalid url" page. =s nice poem, i think you could have had something going with the repetition of the last line starting with "lone wolf..." a bit of a weird syntax/structure of it, altho it could be argued as a reinforcement of the "lone wolf" theme. kewl. |
| peachesncreamsmoothie@yahoo... 2006-05-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseI thought I was reading Edgar Allan Poe for a second. I wish I could write poems as well as you do. I really, really liked it. |
| sinlentstorm 2006-05-02 ch 1, | abuseGreat work, but you need to work a bit on the structuring. |
| multiples of six 2006-05-02 ch 1, | abuseAww.. I know the feeling. This poem is really pretty though =) |
| Sterling Arrow 2006-05-01 ch 1, | abuseForgive my teen angst for a moment, but this poem reminds me of how I've been feeling for quite some time now: alone and lost. No true friends who can/want to be with me, and lost as to my path in life. You just owrded it in a more beautiful way than I could have. It really is a great poem. Many rhymed poems seem forced, but yours flows nicely. Sometimes they actually feel like the author was trying to force a rhyme to work, like searching for a word that would rhyme with the one they wanted to use, and the line seems awkward because they forced a rhyming word in. But as I said, yours is very smooth. It works well. Keep up with the excellent work. |