Wow. I can honestly say that the build up for this poem was completely not worth it. I suppose it is similar to waiting for food at a restuarant and then getting and it tastes awful. That is this poem. Can I tell you are sixteen? No. Can I honestly say this is good? No.

To be completely honest, I disliked it greately. You had some good lines, like 'he dresses like a queen' (which reminds me of Lady Stardust, a David Bowie song) but the 'violent lesbian sex' just ruins everything you've started. You have symbolism, the works, and then you just blow it by using such a harsh phrase that ruins the whole peice.

Maybe leave it as more of a mystery.

Write hard, write long,write until dawn,~FDW

wow! the last line wraps the whole thing up quite nicely, doll! poetic anger...phrases like that stuck in my head all day. i quite admire your style...and i look forward to reading more of your work!

it's proper hard to not publish daily for me...i just have so much. plus, a free period here in the school library. lol.

Kawaii!

PS: You asked me to contact you, but my email was spat back at me. ;_; This was a few months ago, though.

On this poem: Not what one would expect. The lines "He dresses like a queen" and then "dressed for violent lesbian sex" implies that he/she is both boy and girl. Slightly off. Could have used some more gender clarity.

On your response: Touche! Anti-conformism means different things to different people in different places. Sometimes conforming is the best sense of rebellion, and vice versa. In my school, converse+hair dye=punk, which is way rebellious to my normal group. Any sign of either could land an anti-conformist tag. Don't criticize the ideals; criticize the writing styles.

wow you are an intense writer. I like it, its different from most styles i read

This has marvelous word play and shifts of pace. You create the pace well with the word choice, as it flows quickly in places and halts well in the reading. I like the rush of this, like true emotion racing across the page. This pace really enhances the meaning of the words, because it creates a logical speech-thought pattern to match the emotion. Well written.