Reviews for Losing My Religion

Max Radio
2007-01-10
ch 1,

When I first saw the story, I looked forward to reading it. The paragraph lengths were long, but the work itself wasn't long, so there was no overload. It looked very pretty, in other words. :D

However, there are a lot of typos. "If she isn't a model, she defiantly (?) should be." Of course I know what you meant, but a typo's a typo. There are also commas in inappropriate places throughout (not that I'm one to talk), and although the paragraphs are nice-looking, they aren't exactly correct. The subjects change several times within them.

The meaning of the story overall was quite beautiful, and it had a very clean, pure feeling to it, even though there was a shooting and The Underground. The ending was amazing too, "I know now that me and the woman in white will be together, forever."

That he figured out that he was dead is probably my favorite part, and it made everything make so much more sense. It's very inspiring and pretty, and if it weren't for the typos, it would have been a favorite.

7.5/10

=D
2006-08-10
ch 1,

That's really cool, it's really original. I loved it, I have a really short attention span so it's hard for me to finish even a page of reading, but your story kept me reading the whole way through. There are probably some things you could improve on, but I don't know what they are.

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