You know…” he said, “They say men will never experience the agonising pain of childbirth…and there’s something that women will never experience. It’s quite a unique experience called…”

'Joshua immediately dropped the shorter man to his feet, and sent his trainer straight into the man’s groin.

“A KICK IN THE BALLS!” Joshua finished, seeing the agonising pain of the impact clearly visible on the man’s face'

...water EVERYWHERE. My keyboard was not pleased. And now my nose hurts dude.

Yay, i'm reviewing! But y'know, it won't be up to general expetation, or however it is I work my *magic*, ven though i'm as busy as Hannibal leading his elephants across the mountain I had to leave something on this 'cos i'm a fan of JJ. A big fan. He. Rocks. Hard.

So lets get started then.

First of all - the ending. A strange place to being perhaps, but just though it was funny, very 'Thundercats' "have you seen my cake" reverb to the start. Without the start reference. Which is good because that'd be weird.

Am I making ANY kind of sense?

It ended with some humor. Always a nice way to finish it off, give it a different pace and relif from the action.

Which, by the way, you are getting BETTER and BETTER at.

Everytime I read something new from you the pacing...I mean it's just spot on, it really is. The reader is right there with him. -

'The police patrol car screamed around the sharp corner, the wheels struggling greatly to obey the laws of gravity. The driver slammed his foot down on the accelerator and began speeding down the long, narrow road just as two pursuing sedans came round the corner after him.'

This whole opening sentance. I ould just see it happening, in my own way, in my mind. That's what I really like about your style. It's 'fluid' enough to allow the reader to use their imagination, let them see their own picture, you don't force a direction in their mind and so whatever you write next, to a certain extent, can be determind by how the reader wants to see it. I love reading you stories because of that.

I mean it's cleary all there, the plot the action, but you don't tell us all the exact movements and expressions and it helps to bring the story to life in an individual way.

You've got a great handle on your characters, who they are and how they function and each story from you just builds on the foundations of who they are. JJ, as always, one cool motherfucker. Who made me choke on my water, it must be noted. If my keyboard is screwed i'm sending you the bill. ;)

That's it then. Like I said, not my usual but I really dd like this, and I hope to see more of JJ. God that frikin' line...

I'll review your chappie update 'Unconditional Love' whenever I can dude. Gotta go now, busy stuff. See ya.

NOT PROOF READ.

Lol! Hilarious! Will there be a sequel?

I like. JJ is witty, which is even better. It seems those corny one-liners sound much cooller when he says 'em.

That childbirth line. So laame! But also awesome, coz it involved pain.

Sorry, I haven't written one of these in a while. . .

(runs)