This is very very good. I love the description and the imagery- it's quite literally as if you're painting a picture with your words, and that's how poetry should be.

I like the description of her as a Gemini (I'm one two!) and how you should all her emotions-happy and sad- rather than one particular moment. It made it all the more beautiful. Wonderful!

And no, I don't have pink hair. My mother would kill me if I got my hair so much as highlighted. So, I'm stuck as a brunette. Yes, Part Two is in the making. It is called The Grief, and it would have been finished a few days ago except I lent my poem folder with the only copy I had of the half-way done part two to a friend to read, and I'm waiting on it's return. Check within the week- it'll be up soon.

Thank you for reviewing!

I really liked this poem- the style you used really fit what you were saying. Casual, yet deep. There are a few sentences that are a bit odd, but otherwise I think you did a very good job with it. -Strings

hey, thanks for reading my story midnight concerto, i reall appreciated your criticism. this was a great poem, great detail about this person. keep up the great work, hope to hear from you again.-anime freakizoid

The rhythm in this poem seems to flow in a rather urban tone almost. I can feel the emotion and truth of the words emenate. It paints a similar picture of one of my friends for me.

It's as though you captured the emotion of the new 'normal', as the poem is appropriately titled. I quite enjoyed reading it.

~FTM~

Wow, great poem. I really liked it, and I'm not much for poetry. It had a great flow, thought he sentences were kinda hazy at times. I liked it, and I think you've got some real talent there. If I knew the person that you were writing about, I think I'd want to tell her that it'll all be ok and give her a hug or something, lol. All in all great poem :D.

You seemed to me to attach onto a lot of words in this poem. 'But', 'normal', and 'because' are the ones that I caught. I can understand the middle one, but the other two...

It was a nice poem though, and depsite looking like it was sentences broken into a poem it had good flow. Didn't seem like there was a lot of need for it to go on long as it did, but other then that I liked it