Hi, Just wanted to say that i read your story and absaloutley loved every minute of it, even had a lil tear at the end of it. Hope to read more of you stuff soon and i hope you keep writing. x

Oh my god, im tearing up, this was brilliant! I absolutely loved this, it was so unpredictable,i was forever guessing what was going to happen, right up to this chapter. Though the little girl in me wished for him to live again and for them to stay together, it was perfect the way you ended it, and that was the perfect stage to leave their relationship at, and you really stayed true to their characters as they got closer, with raol being funny and sarcastic when lois got too sappy. It had a great plot, and character development, although i have to say i didnt like the way lois sometimes described dory in the beginning, calling her simple minded, making it seem like she didnt like her that much, and i thought it was a little bit exaggerated sometimes about how stupid she is, making the beginning quite comical, which was entertaining but could be a little misleading because it actually got quite serious and moving in the end (although still funny.)
Loved it so much and this is definately at the standard fro publishing, cant wait to read more of yours!

thank you

I do like that it's witty,though, very entertaining

Alright, so I've come to the decision that you are a talented writer. Your characters are funny, you have great spelling/garmmar, you mix up narrative and dialogue. But it was a little hard to get into the story at first.

Okay, when I first heard the word "poltergeist" I immediately thought of Peeves from Harry Potter, but I like how you used the knife to introduce him and then hiself. Also I was a little doubtful when the answer just popped into her head, but I actually thought it was funny when nothing happened.

Okay, so I tend to nitpick, forgive me, but you don't have tags after each line of dialogue. It can get a little confusing if the readers reads too fast.

Also, your spelling and grammar are nearly flawless. Good job on that!

Hi!

Soo, I'm judging your story for judge's pick for the FPSSA. First off, congratulations on being nominated!

So let's get rolling. I liked the beginning, seeing as how I was going through the same thing and could completely relate to it. It was interesting and Joshua was a total plot twist. I didn't think you were talking about him when you mentinoed someone already living there. Also, I do like your characters. They have unique personalities that aren't just cardboard cutouts.

There was one thing I have to regretfully bring up, though. Some of the dialogue felt forced and impersonal for a convo between two friends.

Well, I will read on now. I can't promise to leave a review every chapter, but I will try.

Be happy to know your book made me cry. Ive never read a book that made me cry.

And trust me. Ive read my fair share.

i wish he didnt just leave :l makes me sad

I can't believe it: I actually cried with your story. It's amazing, congratulations.
I loved the way Louis and Raoul ended up saying everything without saying anything. Perfect.

Best general/romance story i've read in a long while.

It had all but the perfect dramatics in it, the awaited moments for a spark of romance, and you did it all so well.

Thanks for the story and sharing your inspiration.

Ouh! I'm crying really hard right now!! I love this story! I even loved the ending but it's so sad! *sob*
Raoul is awesome! He and Lois didn't even come close to kissing but you could feel the chemistry! I want more!! It can't be over already...
Cat's paw is very well written! You can be proud of yourself!
You can sympathize with the characters pretty easily and you like them right off.
But I'm wondering what happend to the pendant-shaped quartz crystal? Shouldn't it somehow help Lois find what she was looking for(whatever that was but I assume it was something to help Raoul stay in the real world)
I love those corny happily ever afters but the story makes up for the kinda melancholic ending!
So, now I'm not crying anymore but there's huge smile plastered on my face! :)

This was a very interesting and different story to read. :) I just finished and although I find the ending sad (*is a sucker for happy endings*) I understand that not much could be done in their case.
I just hope that when Lois dies they will be together.
Thank you for writing this little gem. ^^

Your story is amazing! I love everything about it. And I love Dory, "Chocolate bunnys." XD. Raouls awesome! The ending was sad. But I loved every single page! I hope you write more wonderful stories, I'll be waiting. ;)