Good theme; Till Death Do Us Part. I like it. But... lol i just told someone else the exact same thing... you need quotation marks around what she's saying. At the end of a paragraph though, if the same person is talking in the next paragraph, you don't need quotes at the end of the paragraph, just the beginning. For Example:

"But you see, Chris, I’m not ready to let you go. I still love you; I will ALWAYS love you, no matter what will happen. I won’t let you leave me like this, so that all of my friends could talk about our failed marriage behind my back? I don’t think so.

"You see, when you married me, you promised TILL DEATH DO US PART. Both of us are in perfect health, my love, and we have quite some time together until that day that God takes one of us home..."


In this, since one person is talking throughout the entire chapter, you only need them after the last word in the chapter, and before the first word in every paragraph.


Nice job though =)


*~Black and White Dreams