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| Marajohuiki 2006-10-22 ch 1,   | This is very sweet. |
| laughing in her sleep 2006-07-01 ch 1, | aw that is so sweet @ the end. i love this, its so true. |
| sunshineofyourlife 2006-06-17 ch 1, | wow. i love the signifigance in the difference between sex and lovemaking. so true. excellent job! oh, and thank you very much for the lovely reviews. i'll be sure to read more of your work! --Sunshine |
| simpleplan13 2006-05-26 ch 1, | that's sweet in a weird way... i like it |
| Cloudsinthesky 2006-05-17 ch 1, | I really like this poem, it spoke the truth. Great job. |
| Hana Harry 2006-05-14 ch 1, | Nine months later they give their love a nameAnd beforeyou know it their little angel came. Thats an amazing two lines.Its the kinda thing which would be awesome in a card for a new born baby.Weldone.Love it x |
| R. Jalen 2006-05-14 ch 1, | good concept, but there's something weird about the execution. you have a strong first stanza and then it becomes kind of wishy-washy in the next ones...i think it's the shift from the ABAB rhyme scheme to the CC, DD, EE, FF rhyme schemes. It's just too...limerick-like and i think it gives the poem a different tone than what you're looking for. I think maybe if you had another alternating stanza like the first one it would help make the poem more solid. |
| Raven's Pen 2006-05-12 ch 1, | i found the first stanza very honest, and i agree with it completely. the other part of the poem i definitely like, and the last part is cute. that's what loving someone is about, not the sex. like the difference between purple and red ;) good poem |
| Ella-Watson 2006-05-05 ch 1, | wow. you did an awesome job with this one. i love how you used swear words - it gives so much feeling into your poems. wonderful. |
| poemkitten7 2006-05-05 ch 1, | Aw, this is so cute and true. Sex and love-making are totally different...when you put it that way. ^_^ I love your rhyming scheme and your concept is very thoughtful and original. Keep writing! |
| X.xPrincess.Midnightx.X 2006-05-05 ch 1, | Really like this poem, I think pretty much the same thing in the first stanza. I love the rest of the poem, its a great name to call it, by the way. Fav the last two lines, keep writing. Thanks for the review. -To Be Raven |
| HereForNow 2006-05-04 ch 1, | interesting concept. i really like it, especially the first two lines. good job |