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| Faithless Juliet 2006-05-28 ch 1,  | abuseWhat a culture shock from your last creation - in that one I got the strong sense that you could see/know everything, where as in this I feel like you're blinded, and aren't sure of everything. The narration is girlish, flatteringly flirty with a helpful hint of angst (the raw 'i want you' kind.) I like it; not as strong as the first piece, but still good. You have a talented free-flow all your own. Cherish it. Much love,Juliet. |