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| WickedSilence 2006-05-06 ch 1,   | Let's see... Your poem is nice because it's descriptive and I really like how the repeated lines mark a progression in the poem. I didn't quite appreciate the rhyme; it seemed almost forced sometimes in the middle whereas it made sense in the beginning. But, I think if you tweak the middle part it would be better. Otherwise it's a sound and solid poem. |