Yay! I actually have a friend like Gil. Hmm, I think I'll look forward to reading more of this later.

...that was extremely unique. I have not EVER read a story like that. Well written, filled with sarcasm (which always gets a thumbs-up from me). I was just wondering...what exactly were you doing when you came up with this idea?

(On another note, this kind of reminded me of the era of old horror movies-cheesy, but still have that charm.)

No,no,acyually,this was the best chapter,i think,great supense! Good story,and the end was cool,how you related back to the beggining chapter...

O..it just got interesting! write more!

The beginning realy pulls you in,the phobia thing...im going to next teh next chapter now...

This is really cute! It makes me laugh how it's horror and humor at the same time. Keep going.

Very interesting, I definitely want to read more. The premise is also very attractive, and very unique, soI'd really like to see where it goes. I also like th combination of humour and horror, which is surprisingly fun to read. All I would say is that it would be nice to have really incredibly detailed descriptions of the octopus, corpses, etc (with a few gags snuck in as well).

Nice touch adding the information about phobias. Good dialogue also. I only just read one chapter love it so far.

Huh...

Actually, this is intriguing. Though I think your writing style is a little gender-confused. I'm *reasonably* sure Macy's a girl, but your writing style reads like a guy's. Not necessarily a bad thing; I'd just make a point of saying Macy's a tomboy or something to point out she's actually a girl.

But the octopus thing is slightly amusing.