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Blinking In Astonishment 2008-03-04 . chapter 1
It beats.
sueb262 2006-05-05 . chapter 1
I loved the pattern of this, the play on the word "burning", and the way it all crashed in on itself at the end.
burning in effigy 2006-05-05 . chapter 1
Like the repetition... but the ending kind of confused me. If the heart has been burned away, how is there a shell left? Maybe I'm missing something, but I loved the line "Burning/Away the superficiality" very lovely
Robin Siskin 2006-05-05 . chapter 1
I'm not fond of the line breaks here, but I think you have some lovely imagery here, and it conveys the..euh..aftermath of love quite well.

I don't know exactly what to do about the line breaks, though. There's not much to do besides what you've done.
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