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| DisturbedKittenWriter 2007-06-12 ch 21,  | abuseYay for updates! This one was really good, scott. It really gies more info. There were a couple choppy and repetitive sentences, though. Like this one, "The Queen was in a bed that floated in a large pond. Her red hair fell down the sides of the bed and into the clear pond water." You used pond and bed in both those sentences, and you really need to watch for that. Anyway, good chapter. I enjoyed it :) |
| DisturbedKittenWriter 2007-02-12 ch 20, | abuseOh! Very interesting...and confussing. Maybe I am just too tired to get it...but there are a couple points in this chapter that are a little odd. Hm...I should go back and reread it. Maybe you need a beta reader? Anyway, nice chapter. It makesme even MORE excitedfor Disneyland! 6 days, Skortyportyworty! Woot ^_^ |
| DisturbedKittenWriter 2007-01-26 ch 19, | abuse*screams* You never TOLD me you updated! Oh well...VERY interesting chapter. I can't picture meghan's hair being red lol! I am excited to read more (as usual) so update son! And go read MAIM! |
| DisturbedKittenWriter 2006-12-24 ch 18, | abuseHey Skorty! Great chapter! I can't wait for the next one :) Merry Christmas! |
| DisturbedKittenWriter 2006-11-11 ch 17, | abuse*squeal* You finaly updated! I am so happy! And a tribute to kitty? Yayness! I love this story! Reading it just makes my heart ACHE for disneyland. I miss it so... *sigh*. Anyway, I loved the chaper. Update son! With lurve, ~Kitty |
| Meggielu 2006-09-10 ch 16, | abuseKira called you a "little writing puppy"? Wow. Weird. Maybe that's why she's DISTURBED kitten writter (writter, haha kira!). Anyway, awsome, but also like kira, I like the ones with "us" in them better. Sorry, I had to read the reviews to get an idea of what to write for my final, amazing (sure is amazing, huh?) review! :) Wanna hear my story for spanish? It's funny :P |
| Meggielu 2006-09-10 ch 15, | abuseWow, I didn't realize how far I had to read...:S Anyway, good job. Like it..once again...I can't come up with anything else to say... |
| Meggielu 2006-09-10 ch 14, | abuseIt's my parent's anaversary today. I should do something for them. Maybe frame a picture? |
| Meggielu 2006-09-10 ch 13, | abuseAgain, if you want the characters to be like our little group of friends, you need to change the personalities :P. Anyway, good job. Like your story so far :). |
| Meggielu 2006-09-10 ch 12, | abuseInteresting, as always. Again, I don't think Delia is ANYTHING like me, and Katie isn't anything like Kira, nor is James anything like you. I think that only Isaac is anything like Sam, even though I think you overexaggerated his sarcasm a bit...and I'm more sarcastic and less nice. :P |
| Meggielu 2006-09-10 ch 11, | abuse*kiss* Do I really have to review all these? |
| Meggielu 2006-09-10 ch 10, | abuse:) |
| DisturbedKittenWriter 2006-08-02 ch 16, | abuseWO! Yayness! Very, very good chapter, Skorty pooie! I must admit, I like the chapters with us in them better. I still like these chapters though! I can't wait to read what happens next! Keep going! Wishing you hugs, fuzzy balls of fuzz, a chicken named kitten, and puss in boots in a cage sent by Marten and Katrina, ~Kitty (AKA the girl who hates the stupid stores that insist on having back to school stuff!) |
| DisturbedKittenWriter 2006-07-18 ch 15, | abuseYay! This is so good! I love this chappie! :) Especially the pirates part! Great descriptions too :D I can't wait for the next chappie! PIRATES OF THE CARRIBEAN ROCKS AND SO DOES THE AMAZING DISNEYLAND AND SKORTY'S STORIES! Keep writing my little writing puppy ;) Wishing you inflatable swords (I have one :D), tasty cinnamon sticks, and fluffy balls of fluff, ~Kitty |
| DisturbedKittenWriter 2006-07-15 ch 14, | abuseI LOVE IT! I gives this chapter huggies and lemon flavored ice cream...er... I think the way you set this up is great, Scott. I can't wait to see how sam...I mean, Iss...does with the whole pirates thing! And Meghan says she would llove magic to be real, btw :) Great job! WRITE MORE! :D Wishing you sweet raspberries and friends who are NOT 6 hours away (I miss him o_O), ~Kitty |