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| Lellida 2006-09-05 ch 1,   | Oh my. I love the line about reflections always looking you in the eye-it made me chuckle. The monotony of the day when you described was so dreary and very much a good description of what limbo could be. And my other favorite line is Limbo being deja vu. Really an awesome piece, dreary and very thought-provoking. |
| incognegro 2006-08-13 ch 1, | I'm adding this piece to my favorites. It reminds me of the movie "American Beauty." The only line I don't like in the piece is "Limbo was hopelessness." I think that line tells what the reader can already figure out from the things you show. However, the work is excellent. |
| SachiSachi 2006-07-30 ch 1, | So limbo is certain parts of life. Can't say I havn't felt like that. interesting idea and very well worded, with sarcasm and dark wit. |
| Safira 2006-05-07 ch 1, | This piece of writing immediately captures a reader’s attention from the very first sentence with ‘shock’ images. Words and sentences come together to flow remarkably well, and emotions are conveyed vividly and powerfully. The protagonist’s tone is similar to one where he or she is confiding with the reader, and we cannot help but listen – we are swept away with his or her words and anticipating to see where it ends. In my own opinion, the passage that struck me the hardest was: “You wipe it with one hand, suddenly finding yourself face-to-face with someone whose name escapes you. That's the problem with reflections – they always look you in the eye. You begin to see yourself in third person. Everything's an out-of-body experience these days.” There are times where I can honestly relate to this situation, and I'm sure others can as well. Moreover, I agree with this text’s message that is solidified at the end. “Derail the nightmare. Because don't you know? Limbo is déjà vu disguised as routine.” – Very true indeed. Cheers – Autumn. |
| someone's sideshow 2006-05-06 ch 1, | hmm. True, in a large way.Love this piece. So much emotion, and wonderfully easy to comprhend language.Kudos. |