I like this one. Alot. Although you could describe it as perhaps too simple, I find that this adds to the intensity of the story, captivating the reader and drawing them into each and every word. The short, sharpness of the poem itself reflects the fear and the short lived life of the girl, and I like the layout on the page though I doubt that is deliberate. Keep writing and keep it up.

sad but good..keep writing!

I like it, I just think it's a little too... I don't know simple. I mean, it's a very mature subject, and I think the way it is written kind of undermines it. I think you're a good writer, but I think you should next time dedicate more time to your writing. Nurture it a little more.