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| robott 2006-09-09 ch 1,  | abuseI like the flow to it, very nice |
| Gaki Toki 2006-07-18 ch 1, | abuseOkay, it seriously brought tears to my eyes. I wish I had someone like this. I'm so totally not kidding you. I want a man who would do this for me. I want my own little private Jason who would be cuddly and romantic at the right moments and sarcastic at the right moments and would hold me...forever...through everything, and if we broke up he wouldn't be an **, he'd be like an older brother and would protect me. I want someone like this so bad it hurts my heart (liturally) to think of someone like this. There is no one that I know who's like this and I just wish...I just wish I could have this. I want the perfect man...and I want him to hold me and tell me that Mike was nothing and he has no idea what he's doing or what he's missing or what he's insulting...he's nothing to me and all I want to do is grow my hair and become hot and sexy and get a guy who's so perfect that I can say "IN YOUR FACE MICHAEL!" That's all I want. A simple wish that may never come true. I hope he says something mean to me and something terrible happens so he'll live for it the rest of his life. I love this Erica and I'm sure when you wrote it you wanted something like this too. CURSE THE ADAMS AND MICHAELS OF THIS WORLD! Well, the ones like ours anyway. I can't wait 'til college when boyfriends and girlfriends get serious. I always took heartbreak songs for granted...until I got my heart shattered like a glass vase...and it's so hard to pick up...as if the glass is in the sand of some huge white beach in Florida... That was terrible...not even poetic. The Force is not with me today... I love this poem Erica...I almost cried (lucky me I didn't). Thanks for letting me rant. *blush* ~Gaki |
| oops, heartbreak 2006-05-07 ch 1, | abuse:( Sad. A bit fluffy, but I love it. You've got a good ability to write, obviously ;). |
| burning in effigy 2006-05-06 ch 1, | abuseAww... a very nice poem, like the rhyming and certain lines of the poem, such as: "As forever slips away." "My heart weeps with yours/As we sit in bitter rain."very nice |