This is great - I love the idea, and the line 'the skin-bare bones' especially.

oh my. it was really good. kept me in suspense until the very last line.

Vivid.

This poem was quite suspenseful. The last line was a good way to end the poem. Very nicely written! Keep writing. :)

The rhyming made the poem sort of suspenseful and a little bit (I don't know a word to describe it) "funny" (hmm... I need to expand my vocabulary). Sort of reminds me of nursery rhymes, and (as odd as it seems) Shakespeare's stuff (I really don't know. I'm getting really confused now).

I have no idea if that was your intention... but I really liked the job!