Holy...very R-rated O.o but very good. It uh definitly very descriptive...which is good. I could see the whole scene in my head...O.o Words chosen were pretty good too. =P

Lots of imagery. Yeah...


XD

anyways great poem. Very personal like you are telling the reader a secret

i love it, it brings about the feeling of the situation, well conveyed. The words you chose work well with the flow. i love it.

It so nice that you could make a pome about love and sex with out it being all nasty and what not. It was very well written