Wow, that was really good, the descriptions, flow, and dialogue are excellent. I don't have any criticism at all. The ending was very good as well.

Oh, this was lovely! Abstract and puzzling and lovely. Nicely done!

Brilliant! This goes on my favourite stories list.

I have no complaints about this, it's a wonderful piece. You used words to their full advantage, captured the panic of the main character, and ended it off beautifully.Many, Many Kudos(es) to you!