eh.

harsh, ne?

but you're right. it wasn't that great. just sounded like you were being cruel and harsh on some poor girl that just wanted to be loved, respected.

[Mean, is it not, that we despise your soul so much] Yeah. It IS mean.

so yeah.

the first and second stanzas (whateveryoucallthem) were tolerable -- not as great, but eh -- and then the last stanza. -wince- it seemed as if you just JUMPED from one idea to the other, and the transfer wasn't good, and the destination wasn't good.

it didn't contain most of the great ideas and subjects of your other poems. i was disappointed.

this is just like a rant. ah well. i can tell you were angry. so be it.

[[note: i may seem disapproving, i may seem like another one of those "stupid people that don't know what they're talking about", but i am just offering criticism (and my opinion). ah well. take it or leave it, hey. and i put my email up there. just in case you wanted to rant back to me how "they deserve to die, you deserve to die, etcetera etcetera".

i do like your poems though.

just not this one.]]

Like it alot...it could be more aggressive...

BTW, ppl are talking about what I wrote. Some one even reported me. I dont really care. You guys ranted and raved about how much you hate this chick/dude/it and I made my personal response. I dont like her. I dont care what you people think. I write what I want. Its not like im scared of being banned...its not gonna happen. Babybitch is a perfect example of it. Anyways...I write how I feel, nothing more.

Unto the brave I go...

PS Akemi my name is kazzuru. Dont forget it!

Unlike someone else who I will not name (because I can't remember their name) this is a perfect response to the babyangelgurl threat. That's with three 6's on the end people!

Chibichocobo, Still2twisted and I always wonder who she might steal form next.

BTW, I marvel at your wonderful writing. The prose is lyrical and almost filled with pity till the near end where I laughed. Damn...I feel so bad I could slit my wrists...Damn...no one's watching. Nevermind!

^^

This is awsome.

I'm not sure who you're talking about, seems that the girl (in this poem) is a bit emo. But it's a very well written, it seems kind of condensed into a particular subject - like. I hope that this girl doesn't continue to plagerize.

"She stumbles in the room with her latest prize, / Robbed from the minds of the wisest authors, / "The words are priceless", says her ever adoring parent"

I love that line especially. Keep writing!

Hey, sorry I haven't reviewed in a while, but I HAVE been reading your works, just that the review button rarely works. Anyway, I've also been going through some tough times.

On topic, you are really good at poetry. Keep up the excellent work. In any case... that's all I have to say.