I like it, I really really like it. You definitely touched me. And it being from a guy's perspective is just special, we don't see that around here often. I loved the way he's perceptive and accepted is so calmly. Oh, I definitely felt him hurting, but he just accepted it without putting up a fuss. Good job on this!

Yeah, I already know I'm being mean but I can't help but want a sequel or something with the girl getting her heart broken when her American stud leaves her, lol, and with the narrator being totally over her and not taking her back!

This is a very sad piece. I feel bad for the poor boy, I guess that some things were not ment to be. His heart will mend, and that girl should realize what she did wrong. She was really mean to cheat on him like that.

the poor guy, that's absolutely horrible. if a girl doesn't like someone anymore she should tell him rather than lead him on, it just makes the inevitable more painful in the end ~ Alenor.

That's such a horrible feeling. You portrayed it very well.

Dang...how sad.

Aww. That's sad. Really well written though. Good job! =)

This story works well without the lyrics you know. You may have used them as a prop for inspiration, but I'd say take them out if you ever do a edit, because it works better without. I liked the anti-climax, it was kind of fitting, I don't know why. The narrator is so calm at the beginning, and we already had the random act of violence with him and the steering wheel, I couldn't really predict where it was going, it could swing either way...dramatic ending or not. I liked the ending you wrote, it's much better than a huge tension dripping moment when he stumbles into her room to find them...'nuff said. One little thing though that I didn't get - if she was having an affair, then why didn't she break it off? He gave her the chance to. And if she wanted to stay in the relationship so badly, then why did she make it so obvious that she wasn't comftorble with him? When she told him she 'loved' him, okay he picked up on the subtle hints, because he knew her so well. But at the cinema, it seemed like she was obviously ignoring him. Ach, silly teenage girls.

omg..I can't believe how amazing you are at writing..I love it..it kind of me reminded about the end of my relationship with my ex-boyfriend..though never of us left each other for some one else..there was just no love left..man, the memories..

First of all, thanks for reviewing my story! I like your idea about going more into the 'almost killing them' thing. That story was based on my experience, and that guy and I really did talk about almost dieing that day out on the bleachers...Anyways, I'll elaborate for you here--the weekend before I was driving him to a different city, and I guess I didn't stop at the stop sign long enough because I pulled out and this huge truck hit the front of the car. One second earlier and we would've most likely died...

Anyways, I like this part of your story because I've felt exactly like this. Sometimes I just think about how different things would be if I hadn't done some of the stupid things I did...

"...I wish with all my heart that I can start all over again, beginning with that day.

Maybe then, things would be different.

Maybe then, my heart wouldn’t be breaking into a thousand pieces..."

Aww. This is so sad. Once again, you such a great writer, and this one shot is no exception! You have a way about ending stories that I love. The last line is always perfect.

wow. this was excellent, it read beautifully. So sad yet beautiful. I could really imagine it as I was reading it. Keep up the good work!

For me, this piece is no cliche. It's just so beautifully, realistically painful. Bravo.

Powerful...I can really feel the emotion. It is also very real, despite being slightly clichéd...but like you said, "almost all romances are clichéd". I really liked that phrase, because it is true that all authors try to "break out of the mold". Good work!