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| Fiore Chnudth 2006-07-02 ch 1,  | abuseThis is a very interesting prologue or introduction (which I think it must be or at least hope it to be). The story itself is very interessting and dealing with a topic of great importance, but also one often left alone. I think the language could use a second glance. It sometimes seems a bit messy and there are some gramatical errors. But these things I'm sure you see when you someday decide to look it over again. Hope you'll post a following chapter real soon... KHKHL |
| Taltush/MeiMei 2006-05-09 ch 1, | abuseExcellent beginning to what I HOPE is going to be a longer story. It's very well written, and the choice of topic is very interesting. I really like it. |
| Purple_Nurple 2006-05-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseWell, I'll say that the story is great enough to catch my attention, so let's see what happens from there. Oh yeah, and welcome back to FP. You've been gone a while! |