This is really good! There seems to be a lot going on here. I love the names you've chosen for your characters...I'm a name freak :P. Locations are something I always have trouble with...I feel like I need a map! That's not nesessarily a mark on you, though...that's all my incompetence. The political relations are a bit confusing for me...but I'm sure that's something that becomes clear later.

It's hard to get the full effect with only two chapters...don't give up now!

-Mephistophelian