I love how you create a very stifled, repressed atmosphere so quickly and effectively. This story reminds me of one of those old black and white movies where the character show no emotion in their voice or expression, though you can tell their hearts are breaking on the inside. I also love how you used the tea to tie in here - very clever.

Wow. You're too good a writer for your own good. You should stick FictionPress on a shelf and start trying to findsomeone to publish your work. It's really good. Honestly. My friends and family say that *I* have a passion for writing and it's *good*, but, honestly, you are a better writer with twice, if not triple, my passion. I've always hoped to be wandering through a book store and one of my books on the shelf, but you know what would be better? If I saw your book (or books). Then I could say that I knew you. Well, sort of. Later! ^-^!

Lovely oneshot.

I've always wondered about this particular topic - falling out of love. How can people promise that they'll love each other forever? Forever's a long time, and look at the divorce rates in our country alone. It's sad to see that this happens so often.

Loved it. Good for you.

Cheers,
Sammy

I love emotional pieces like this, where rather than being completely over-the-top there's just a restrained sense of emotion, almost suspensful.

It's definitly sad, and I like the references to things the reader doesn't really know about, but that leave the reader to draw their own colcusions. Eg) the man in the bookshop (whoever he may be).

It's a great idea, too. So kudos. ^^

nice short piece. its so sad, the thought of "falling out of love"