I like the contrast between the sentences in bold and the whole poem. It's interesting, puzzling though! I wouldn't say this flows as well as some of your other pieces, but it has some lovely images in it and some really great word choices.

i dont get it. Its fab, and all, but I DONT GET IT.*bangs head with keyboard*This is proof you are a better poet than me. I'm holding you to that. AND WHAT DID YOU MEAN WHEN YOU SAID "find better morals for friend"?They didnt steal the money iz. People gave it to them. All will be explained son.

you is a genius darling.

oh, this is wonderful. i love the doublemeaning , very very well .

good experiment! the format really works, v clever. i love hidden meanings, well it's not that hidden i guess, bt you know what i mean. anyway, really goodx