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| found.eventually 2008-05-11 ch 1,  | abuseAw! That was so cute! And different, too. I mean, really, now, how many times do we get to read stories that has yoga in it, right? (Don't bother correcting me. XP) I would've liked it longer, though. Darn it. He's a hot guy who does yoga. Read: Hot bod. |
| faerie-gumdrops 2008-04-12 ch 1, | abuseI've never done yoga. Is it any good? 'Se needed to get more exercise done' Typo - the se should be a she, I'm guessing. 'one that complemented his face instead of protest against it' I think protest should be protesting I really liked this - short and sweet. You definitely write the sweetest stories I'm reading at the moment - they always make me feel all warm and nice, which is great. And it's not like any are epic love stories that could never happen - like this, they concentrate on little moments that could happen all the time and are really lovely. Ah I've got through many a lecture looking at a cute boy in front of me. And maybe not even that cute a boy - just a boy lol, I have very strange taste sometimes. And this strange yoga guy does sound very cute. |
| catapultion 2006-06-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseAhh, so way back when, in a UR chat, I said I'd review your original fics. Well, yes, that was about a month ago, but I'm reviewing! I'm really sorry it took me so long (finals, ack) but now that it's summer, I've finally got the time. =) Anyways. I really liked this little piece. I thought this idea was truly pretty creative--turning something ordinary and common-place like yoga lessons to something more. It was cute, but believable. If you wanted to perhaps lengthen this and add a bit more character to Abby, you could tell us why she's in a yoga lesson in the first place (stress? grandma made her? accidently walked in?). And also, I had to wonder, why was she in a skirt if attending a yoga lesson? It doesn't seem practical (unless she DID walk in by accident)*shrugs* That was just a little bit that didn't quite fit (and also me being a nitpick). But over all, I really enjoyed it. Great work! =) |
| shiiki 2006-05-31 ch 1, anon. | abuseI'm impressed - that was one spot-on description of a 'love-at-first-sight' style meeting! You describe people very well, too. And I like that the boy wasn't drop-dead gorgeous, but Abby was drawn to him nevertheless.I do admire how you have these original ideas! Myself, I can never break away from fanfiction ... |