Reviews for Contemplating Whatever

Reviews For: Contemplating Whatever

Itsuyaya 2008-04-09 ch 5,	abuseReally angry at someone, are we?
Itsuyaya 2008-04-09 ch 2,	abuseFunny, but it confused the hell out of the friend hovering over my shoulder. ^-^!
tawnyfawn 2006-05-14 ch 5,	abuseAs usual, good. (I really need to find some better words than 'good.' Good is such a boring word, though I guess it's not as bad as 'nice.') I really liked liked the set of:"It's notentirelybecause I'm stunningly beautiful(although I am)."Just because I guess it was humourous, though maybe in a slightly dark way. And ALSO "we must all swallow the bitter truth/sooner or later," becauase of the way it worked with the lines preceeding it. Just the whole theme of the poision-ee (?) maybe being in denial. I liked it. Anyway, yes, good. =) (And there's that pesky 'good' again! =P)
tawnyfawn 2006-05-13 ch 4,	abuseAgain, very nice, and lots of stand-out lines. "I can take care of myself./(It's not just something I'm saying.)" "Up yours, with love..." "See, I've never touched that razor for other than shaving purposes..." I could go on (but I won't, because I'm in a hurry. ^^;). Um, something constructive... With the line that I love, about the razor, it might make more sense if you said 'for ANYTHING other than shaving purposes.' That would make it more like something that someone is likely to say, but it also might compromise the flow, so I don't know. Anyway, good job. ^^
tawnyfawn 2006-05-12 ch 3,	abuseA personified poem about a flower, hey? The first time I read this, I pretty much forgot it said that in the AN, and it still works just a love/heartache kind of poem. But then I remembered it was supposed to be about a flower (though I guess it would be open to interpretation) and it works that way too, so good job. What I personally got from it (though I could be possibly/definitly wrong) was kind of how a flower is used as a tool for love. And how in the end, although the flower IS a symbol for love, it can also just be a flower. I loved the lines "I am hopeless, not heartless,/but I realize/that they look the same/on the outside." I thought the construction of the poem was really quite effective, especially in the beginning, what with the four lines, then a break in bold (and then repeated three times (or something)). There was also some slight aliteration in the first half which worked really well. In the first section: love/love, in the second: sinners/saints, and in the third: hopeless/heartless. It wasn't a big deal, but it did make a difference while reading the poem... In a good way. Good stuff.
tawnyfawn 2006-05-10 ch 2,	abuseSeriously loved this poem. I can't even really define why I loved it so much, but it just worked really well. The theme is what really struck me - the overall idea of the poem was great. But you also carried out the idea really well. Again, the use of itallics, though I suppose this time they were used more instead of quotation marks, but it still added another level to the poem... if you know what I mean. ^^; Your language throughout this as well was just great as well. 'but I parry wordlessly with a roll of my eyes,' was excellent. A great description, and one that I am bound to accidentally bastardise and use when I write in the future. =P That line was just so... clever! And the end was the kind of "deep" that I like. Just kind of obscure and not exactly saying it all at once. I also liked some of the singular rhymes in this poem. I don't even know if you added them intentionally or not, but in the very first stanza '...and then you die/but I' seemed as if you'd done it on purpose, maybe even subconsciously. And then, of course, the whole last stanza with the right/torchlight rhyme. Anyway, as I said, I absolutely loved this. Definitely going on my fave stories. (Sometimes a poem just "speaks to you," you know?)
tawnyfawn 2006-05-10 ch 1,	abuseI particularly liked this poem from the 'I know/you'll be gone in/two more seconds' and then onto the end. That whole ending was just really quite powerful. And the plea to let the memory that he fades into be a good one was just... one of those lines, you know, that you love and you can't quite figure out why. ^^ And the whole last stanza was nice and kind of abstract or surreal, and finished it off nicely, I think because there were some bits in the rest of the poem that were also quite 'dreamlike' (for lack of a better word) and it tied it all together nicely. I also liked your distinctive style, what with some lines being in itallics and the rest not. Not only did it seem to place empahsis on the words that were in itallics, but it broke them up from the rest even more. Like, if I was to then read the poem out loud, they seem even more seperate. Kind of like punctuation-of-the-font, or something. =P Anyway, liked this, all up. It was nice. PS. Thanks for reviewing some of my poetry. I'm actually not much of a poet, and only write non-prose when the mood strikes, but your comments were lovely and helpful as well. ^^
emeraude-irlandais 2006-05-10 ch 2,	abuseNice ending. :) I have conversations with a friend that seem to follow this pattern- he's the morbid one, always talking about how we're going to die anyway, so you have to take risks, etc. I'm the one always reminding him that there's a way out of every situation. :) Good read. I wish there was a different title for the collection, though. ^^ Keep writin'! `~bella~`

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