wow.

completley.

totally.

awesome.

i loved it.

I like the sense of freedom in this; or allowance of free will - it's an interesting comparison from the strength of saying anyone can ravage me, but you still cry yourself to sleep. I like how you play up both sides of it. We are all double-sided creatures. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.

Wow, very powerful. I liked it a lot, especially the end, and this line "You won’t leave my mind tangled insweat soaked sheets as I cry myself to sleep." That was by far the best section. You're a wonderful writer.

I don't belive this. 800,0 authors on this sight and I find an author whose name I recognize. I love the mind/sheets metaphor, I think I'm going to put you on on author alet.

To be honest, I'm not quite sure I like it. Not because of the subject, mind you (though that is shocking enough), but because of the abruptness each stanza has as it leaps with such edgy words. And I think, perhaps, that the "tick-tick-tick" should be removed; it does not add anything to the poem, just distracts. Add "..." after each "sleep." and that will attain the same effect of time passing.

On a good note, the last three lines were awesome. Truly dramatic, powerful, and saddening. I would read the poem again just to reach those last lines.

I like this a lot! It really flows and has a wierd story... I LOVE IT! Write On!