that was GREAT! I love the part that goes,"** you **" OH MY ** GOD that was so funny. Please keep writing like this

The tone of this works well to get across the emotions described. Very independent voice that enhances the narrative well. Good work.

that's good-actually, very good. i liked the "final warning, heed it well / or i'll use haitian voodoo to transport you to a desolate well / (hah) / enjoy hell." perfectly sycical, just the way i like it. good job!

This was very interesting. I liked these lines the best they were powerful and made me think.

"Don’t provoke me how many times must it be spoken

Don’t open Pandora’s box even if it seems to be broken"

~the Strsnger in the moonlight~

I get the distinct feeling you were angry when you wrote thim Hime-san. *grins* :D But anyhow I like dis alot love the rhym,es y6ou ROCK!

~Me~

interesting. kinda vauge...but if i read it a few more times i'm sure i would get a feel for the meaning...or at least one of my own. i like how you speak...realistically. i don't like it when people are like "thus..hither" and ** cause it's so fake. you use some big words cause you know you can take it and you cuss here and there too cause you know you can feel it.

With sincerity from my heart...

Gently your words breeze and build ever so gently, into a sudden gust of wind that blows the performing architect away. Abruptly this gust settles peaceably into that calm and silent space in, which one expects a torrential downpour soon to arrive and refresh the protagonist; Orpheus' affianced; soon to be wedded…

This is BRILLIANT! This is BEAUTIFUL! You are a **' G E N I U S and your kingdom is your own me thinks and you inspire me!

And remember this:

You know no other intention but your own.You know no other than yourself and when you do you have your freedom that you can use to brilliant excess...

...and this performing architect will always encourage, admire and applaud every effort and demonstration of yours to attaining the above and promises never to undermine your efforts.

polla filakia!

the performing architect of this poem