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| Kumquat21 2006-11-11 ch 1,  | abuseThis is so real it's scary. I hate it when people say 'oh, your -Insert Relative Here- would have been so much better at -insert thing here.-' How do they know? The relative probably would have been pretty bad too, if they had been there. They're just fooling themselves! We're all human, never forget that. Or if they WERE better than you at it, then you're probably better at other things then them! The only thing worse than that is when they said THEY would have behaved so much better . . . Yeah, Right. Anyway, I went off into a rant, but I meant to say that this rings true, and is well written, with a good rhyming pattern and excellent rhymes. Two thumbs up! |
| caralene 2006-09-30 ch 1, | abuseVery simple yet filled with so much meaning. A few words yet the passion is ten times greater. To make it short, I like the poem. :-) |
| Ladiebug 2006-07-31 ch 1, | abuseVery powerfully written. i can feel all your pent up emotion in that poem.Is this really what your grandparents are like? If so, I feel for you.It sounded like a really painful poem. But anyway, beautifully written. |
| Plinky 2006-07-14 ch 1, | abuseNice repetition used in the first few lines. ;) Very emotional. Lovely. Keep writing! |
| Emiley 2006-05-11 ch 1, | abuseThis is so sad, and beautiful. You could be writing about my life (my partner, not my father) If this is your life, please know you are not alone. A friend once told me you cant produce truely good art while you are happy and well fed. I think I must agree with this. Anyhow thankyou for sharing. :) |