interesting imagery. i loved those last 3 lines at the end...beautiful:)

~mez~

I wasn't sure about this one at first, to be honest. In fact, I was initially disappointed, because it seemed a little clunky and hobbled together.

Then, I read it out loud.

Yeah, I was wrong. This is almost sing-song, though less so that it retains its respectability. There is a natural flow to your verse that CANNOT be learned. Writing prose is a skill, but writing rhythmically like this, well, you either have it, or you don't, as the saying goes. As someone stricter in grammatical throes, I would suggest tidying up the form of this poem, to reduce the cluttered appearance that I first assumed, but you're the poetic mistress, not me. Anyway, great job, my friendly friend.

I really like this peom, L'amour est une oiseau rebelle.