Awesome poem, the inagery of the venomous snake is the perfect choice for bitterness and resentment. I like the way you use the biblical name Mara. It is so true that we poison ourselves even more than the other person when we are not able to forgive. And yet it is so hard sometimes. Great poem.

thank you for all your great reviews, I'm glad you enjoyed my writes. and yes, you can put those lines from "Alone" in your xanga entry if you want.

I do write music sometimes along with my songs, but I usually have difficulty writing music that I think would fit a specific song, so mostly I just stick to music-less poems.

thanks again for reading and reviewing.

Wonderful imagery. A bit blunt around the edges, but it works.

Nice work, keep writing.

-Seras

The descriptive words you used were absolutely magnificent. They personified bitterness to perfection. Very effective to be sure. As for the actual subject matter itself, I really liked the idea of it. You conveyed masterfully how bitterness can take over you even if you try to resist it. The use of the Biblical word was a nice touch. All around nice work on this. I definately could identify with it.

~*~AbunaiChikara

wow, thats exactly how I feel. great poem. Im sure many others feel the vipers venom also.