You told me in your response that you thought the rhythm was a bit off...I think it's fine. I really like rhyming poems...that's the kind I mainly write and I think you wrote this one well.

This is beautiful. I wish I could write so well!

ah kawaii! hope u gave it to ur mom

Liz-Beth,I really liked this poem.. It was a contrast to your normal dark, no-choice, death-like, depressing poems... but I think that this poem is oozing with love.

Love it!'Here I am, a normal teenOr a child, maybe in between'you've written a poetic peom!