I loved it, very pretty, even if I'm not understanding any deep meaning behind it (fever muddles the brain) you're one of the people that makes me feel like crud about my own work. Nevertheless, I loved it.

i really love thata ending.. beautiful piece

Beautiful piece. Reminds me of why I love reading your work :) The imagery you've chosen is lovely. I particularly liked "My feet felt no/Absolute direction/Other than to find/Stability on their/Landing..." A simple image but you wrote it in such a way that it added depth and feeling. Nice choice.

I also liked the way a sentence joined two stanza's together (the term for it has escaped me at this moment). It created a flow and rhythm easily enjoyed. I also liked the repeated image of the sugar blossom towards the end of the piece :)

Excellent work as ever. Great writing.

A deft evocation of our falling out of step with nature to perform our own fatuous dance to the music of time. Masterful.

Superb transition here; it feels like a transition throughout, changing from one complete emotion to the next. It felt like two explanation diverging into one emotion: “My feet felt no/Absolute direction/Other than to find/Stability on their/Landing, so as not/To create imbalance/In the peace” - I loved the sense of walking/standing/being the whole of ones person feeling of that stanza. People always have a sense of direction in their poetry but I enjoyed how you haven’t yet plotted the course.

“Catching each gentle lap/Of breath’s undulation/& nature heaves a sigh/At humankind’s/Burdens, so starts/To weep” - Fabulous ending; I loved how you intermingled the idea of nature as a godly thing, it knows us, fears us, and loves us. It feels our burdens deeply like scratching our names into a tree trunk and it knows that it is vulnerable in our hands but still it weeps for the conditions of the human soul. Wonderful.

Juliet.

Wow this is beautifully written wonderful flow of words you have outdone yourself again

Strikes me with an image of youthful conformity and vague confusion. A subtle and most pleasant read, worthy of multiple visits.