Wow. I love the lines, "fracture like an/echo,..." and "leaving goes by/ice thin slow," and also, "...maybe/these displays will/cause the beat to/slip a joint,". Okay so that "higlight" was a little scrambled and pretty much "highlight"ed the whole poem but yeah. I really love it. And the repition of the same ideas, the heart on the hand... And then hand and grasp... just great imagery. This is what poetry should be. Bravo. I love love love it. Absolute perfection.

fingerpaint your/heart into my/hand is really powerful and I'm glad you repeated it. Beautiful imagery and the longing is palpable.

WHOA! This is too amazing to review. Simply beautiful. Oh wow, I'm speechless. Wonderful wonderful wonderful job! Thanks for the review!

Well-chosen and deliberate words. The meaning and emotion are strongly captured and portrayed. Nicely done.

ethereal fleeting & heartstoppingly gorgeous. word perfect. it seemed almost pre-emptively regretful.

fingerpaint yourheart into myhand,-has a surprised tone to it.

slippery and silohetting

An interesting read... and I like the idea behind the poem. The format is different, and it gives the poem a different "beat" than if it was written .. "properly"

"fingerpaint your/heart into my/hand" seems almost childish and so how you captured that feeling.