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| stranger with your doorkey 2008-04-26 ch 4,   | cute. :) ~stranger |
| Shontara 2008-03-30 ch 4, | This story had soo much potential. I read the summary and thought it would be more than it was. You had this great idea that you could have soared with, but you kinda dragged it along. I think the thing that annoyed me the most was how you brought Luke hating black people so valiantly, but you don't say why, maybe the story isn't done, but with the last line most people would figure it was. There was no back story, no home life, no one to influence his racism and people don't come out of the womb racist. Maybe you should take this down and rewrite, because it has a hell of a lot of potential, that was not filled. Shontara |
| IndianPrincess 2008-03-29 ch 4, | I liked this story is this all or do you plan to add more? Thanks for sharing and if you are planning to add more I'm so looking forward to see what happens next I was enjoying reading it. IP |
| Peachie Miss 2007-04-23 ch 4, | How nice. It was a bit stop and go, but I liked the idea and it was pretty good, wish it would've been a bit longer though! |
| ThatJazzy3 2006-07-07 ch 1, | I'm intrigued.The chacters seems so real.You have my attention,write more! |
| Olivine 2006-05-14 ch 4, | oh, now that was a good story. short, yes, but that doesnt matter. it definitely had a good message. spelling couldve been a bit, better, though. in the first paragraph of this paragraph, i saw 'not' instead of 'now' and i saw other simple misspellings in earlier chapters. they werent big, or anything; just proofreading the chapters would get them out, easily. you did a great job, here. and i think it was nice to read a single story in one sitting, instead of having to wait for chapters, even if it is a good story youre waiting for. keep on writing ~~MWRenaee-:|:- |
| Olivine 2006-05-14 ch 2, | let me just say that the great mahatma gandhi was NOT black. he was indian. that is different. ive got nothing against blacks, at all. im just saying (mostly because i get very agitated, when it comes to me and my culture; i am indian) that luke calling him black was very wrong. he was very wrong. not only about gandhi, but about blacks. i completely disagree with him in everything he thinks about blacks. theyre people!! a different color, maybe, but so am i. i want to meet luke. i want to see what hed say if he met ME. -mutters something rude about luke- anyways, im guessing, after two chapters, that this is a story to prove him wrong. i love proving people wrong, ive already started to like this story, and so i think ill like this story :) ill keep on reading... keep on writing ~~MWRenaee-:|:- |