Good, short story.

~Twilight Starr~

I like it but the speach it not correct for the time it should be more older you know? But it is really good otherwise!

Dark. But interesting. Still, Hell was made more as a prison than a kingdom in my POV, and God is more powerful, so, it's unlikely that the angels would be able to get him with their arrows. Good though.

The description at the beginning was particularly good. About the fingers tapping, etc. Interesting idea, too.